Post Write
After writing my first draft I thought it came out better than I thought it would while I was writing it. I thought the story was appropriate for the question and it was explained fairly well.
There are a few thing missing. There is not enough detail in the body of the essay. Specifically: the story. You get the idea of it but you wonder, how he saved his ten co-workers, or where was he in the building when the plane hit. Also I should make the introduction a little clearer, and a bit longer.
Questions I have for readers are: Do you think the story works with the question well? Would you say the introduction or the conclusion needs some work? Overall, how was the flow, if any?
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