Tellis, Ashley J. “Reconciling with the Taliban” Carnegie endowment.org (2009). American Diplomacy. 2009. Web. 20 November 2009.
In the piece, “Reconciling with the Taliban,” Tellis talks about how we may be losing the war in Afghanistan. She uses evidence that was used in Iraq to support the statement we are losing Afghanistan. It ends with “If we are not winning we are losing, there is no draw in this type of war.”
Tellis is part of the Carnegie Endowment for International Peace, which is a focus on international relations and specifically for this time period, the war on terror. She has also been focused on this topic for several years. I think she knows what she talks about. Mostly because of her in depth detail she gives into her examples that prove her points. The only downside is it was published in May. Making it a bit outdated. But most of the facts still remain, “we are losing this war,” for example. The journal is very credible. It is used around the world to give out the facts and only facts. Nothing is thrown in to enhance the stories as you may have seen on television.
Monday, November 30, 2009
Monday, November 9, 2009
Proposal Draft 1 P.W.
After writing my first draft for my proposal i feel strong about the way i wrote it. I felt it had a purpose and that it could be used as a real proposal, which is what i was aiming for.
Things i need to work on are my conclusion and some more detail in the personal story. I definitely think the conclusion is short and missing something. I hope my partner can help me with that.
-Do you think my proposal is explained well?
-Anything else need to be changed, as far as making this a real proposal?
Things i need to work on are my conclusion and some more detail in the personal story. I definitely think the conclusion is short and missing something. I hope my partner can help me with that.
-Do you think my proposal is explained well?
-Anything else need to be changed, as far as making this a real proposal?
Proposal Draft 1
Stopping Long Lines at Bookstore
Proposal Essay
Draft 1
As if the price of college textbooks isn’t enough, you have to wait in a line for up to two hours just to get a book that might not even be in stock. It seems that the management of the Bristol Community College bookstore could use some assistance.
During my first week at BCC, I was preparing for my classes accordingly, and that includes buying my class textbooks. When I stepped into G building I saw a line almost reaching the doors you walk in. I then waited two and a half hours just to get someone to look for my books. After another twenty minutes of someone searching for them they only had one of the four I needed in stock, which meant I needed to come back. The following week I returned to a line similar to the first one I waited in; at least they had my books this time.
It shouldn’t have to cost money just to help students get their books sooner and faster. A better more efficient way to distribute the books should be developed.
A good way to help the clustering of lines is to have the students drop off their schedule at the beginning of the day. This way the employees could have time to gather the books together while students go on with their day. Then at a later that day the student could come and pick up their books and pay for them. As for some books being out of stock you could easily say they could just order more books, but that can be costly for the school. What could be done is the bookstore could talk to the teachers more about the way they will teach their class. So the store knows whether or not teachers will want a textbook for their class. This will give the store more money to spend on buying books for the classes that will be using them.
Solving these two problems would save students a lot of aggravation and stress. The last thing we need to work into our schedule is two hours to be stuck in a line waiting for textbooks.
Proposal Essay
Draft 1
As if the price of college textbooks isn’t enough, you have to wait in a line for up to two hours just to get a book that might not even be in stock. It seems that the management of the Bristol Community College bookstore could use some assistance.
During my first week at BCC, I was preparing for my classes accordingly, and that includes buying my class textbooks. When I stepped into G building I saw a line almost reaching the doors you walk in. I then waited two and a half hours just to get someone to look for my books. After another twenty minutes of someone searching for them they only had one of the four I needed in stock, which meant I needed to come back. The following week I returned to a line similar to the first one I waited in; at least they had my books this time.
It shouldn’t have to cost money just to help students get their books sooner and faster. A better more efficient way to distribute the books should be developed.
A good way to help the clustering of lines is to have the students drop off their schedule at the beginning of the day. This way the employees could have time to gather the books together while students go on with their day. Then at a later that day the student could come and pick up their books and pay for them. As for some books being out of stock you could easily say they could just order more books, but that can be costly for the school. What could be done is the bookstore could talk to the teachers more about the way they will teach their class. So the store knows whether or not teachers will want a textbook for their class. This will give the store more money to spend on buying books for the classes that will be using them.
Solving these two problems would save students a lot of aggravation and stress. The last thing we need to work into our schedule is two hours to be stuck in a line waiting for textbooks.
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